A company wants to use money to help employees work better One way is to improve the technology equipment computers printers used by employees and improve efficiency Another way is to redesign the space to make the working environment more comfortable and | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A company wants to use money to help employees
work better. One way is to improve the technology
equipment (computers, printers) used by employees
and improve efficiency. Another way is to redesign the
space to make the working environment more
comfortable and have more meeting rooms for
discussion. Which way do you recommend? Why?

It is crucially important for companies to reinvest the money in their jobs and employees to enhance the efficiency among workforce resulting in more profits for the company’s owners. In this regard, using money to purchase more technological equipment, supported by some people, would increase efficiency. Others, including me, hold the view that employees would benefit more by redesigning the workplace. Three are two main advantages which I will delve into in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, if the workers find the work environment as a place where they feel ease, they would work better. To clarify, there would not be any discomfortable or irritation around the place they work. As a result, they feel more closeness to the work environment, consequently, the efficiency would improve. In an experiment set out by one of the famous institute in Iran, as an example, two groups of workers were chosen to work in two different places. One place was not as convenient as the other one. The worker felt not great during completing the tasks. The other one, on the other hand, had places to rest, moreover, the work environment was spacious enough that workers did implement the projects with no barriers. The results were astonishing. The workers in the well-designed workplace did complete the task with fewer mistakes in less time, compared to the group that was absolutely uncomfortable performing the task. The experiments clearly show that redesigning the environment of the place, people work has really positive impacts on their psychological and better financial outcomes for the companies’ owners.
Second, meeting rooms or in some cases, resting rooms, provide workers the time to discuss their problems during the job. This would contribute to boosting the experience, they receive from their employees. This occurs a lot, especially for a newcomer, less experienced workers. What if there were not such places to share their faults with experienced workers, they would not be able correct their faults, so the efficiency, finally the company’s profit would diminish. It makes a team spirit, benefiting both workers and the companies.
To sum up, redesigning the environment, people work there, not only augments the efficient outcomes, it would assist the workers to increase their knowledge by discussing with experience, which helps them to be more prepared, resulting in better financial for the owner of the companies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, moreover, really, second, so, well, as a result, in some cases, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30512820513 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89978234917 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6729073419 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.45 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193375233775 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577426173115 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528533334564 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118763634083 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646903047238 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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