is contribution between science and engineering more important than artists and writers?
From the day we started our education in school, teachers told us, no matter what your job is, you must do your best. Why so, all of the works are highly connected to each other and if someone doesn’t do his job good, it can effect on the result of others job too. But, what jobs has the most influence on each other? In my view, those jobs which by collaborating with each other can make the world a better place to live are those jobs which we must pay close attention to them and help them to have a better communication. Nowadays, based on this fact that our life is affected by science and engineering more than anything else, the contribution between science and engineering is much more important than other majors.
Firstly, scientists and engineers are those who truly change the word. By having a glance at all features which have surrounded our life we can easily realize that our life more than art, is mixed of science and engineering. They can change so many aspects of our life. All of us like to live in a building which cuts the edge. Drive with a car which is highly safe thanks to newest technology which has used in, and all of these are in the result of deep contribution between science and engineering. In my view, without science and engineering life would be really hard and unsafe. That’s why I think contribution between science and engineering is really important. Why so, it can change all of the aspects of our life
Secondly, the effect of science and engineering on life is much more than art. For having a pleasure life, we definitely need art as much as we need science. But in long term, science and engineering make bigger changes in our life. These fields have deep effects on the building we live in, the car we use for transportation and even the food that we eat. By using art, we cannot make a car or a building safe against earthquake, or produce a healthier food, but science and engineering can. So, the contribution between science and engineering is more important.
To sum up, all I want to say is that, art is really important and we must pay attention to it. Why so, the life is not just about body, it is about soul too. And artist and writers are who influence on our souls. But in this highly developed century, we need science and engineering more than art, why so by using these two fields we can make life better for others while, art cannot make a change in this scale.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... job is, you must do your best. Why so, all of the works are highly connected to each othe...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the newest'.
Suggestion: to the newest
... with a car which is highly safe thanks to newest technology which has used in, and all o...
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Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...really important. Why so, it can change all of the aspects of our life Secondly, the ef...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, i think, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49887640449 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53903349217 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422471910112 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7087779905 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2272727273 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300246693331 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109310931441 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141592557719 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193022849088 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227077017132 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.37 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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