D/A: Competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships.
competition has become the daily part of our life and we need to be competent enough in order to survive.
Such competitiveness can drastically effect the relationship between the society. I personally, I believe that the race to be first is negatively affecting the friendship among two. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The inner jealousy among us makes us crave for the things which the other person possess. The effect of this is that we strive for also having that thing and finally tease the other. this contentment at the end shown by the person towards the another is what is undermining the relationship between them and engenders a sense of competition in their minds. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. my father opened a business of textile by collaborating with his childhood peer. Initially, the business flourished and both of them were able to fulfill their dreams what they wanted to do in their life. but slowly things started to change and when my father bought a car, his friend in order to show off bought two cars and this went on and on resulting in bitterness in their friendship which ultimately lead to a schism between them and finally there were two branches of the company. Therefore, the sense of vie undermines the camaraderie.
when there is a strong bond between people the community collectively burgeoning to its pinnacle. However, a sense of competition acts an infestation in the wood to ultimately shake the foundations of the society making it to crumble. For instance, when I was in college I had a 4 friends and we jointly laid the foundation for a student chapter to help the fresher's by making them aware of the college culture and making turns to attend them personally to clear their doubts but then time of exams came and everything changed. Previously, as we are eager to help the students now become reluctant in it thinking that if we go to help the fresher's we will not get time for ourselves to study and others would score better marks. this sense of competition gave birth to schism among us making us recriminating over one another and eventually leading to abandon our chapter and give rise to lack of trust between us.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that race to become better than others surge our camaraderie. this is because it causes to make divisions between friends and a split in their work and because it is responsible for forefeiting a chapter and altering the level of trust among friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78004535147 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77165784255 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3350066232 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.947368421 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128317355642 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399487811408 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445400991605 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787721354196 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221265277918 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.