The Director Who Does Not Read Your Letter
A few years ago, I had a big graduation project which the most wonderful yet challenging experience. It was about preparing to open a mock trial at university. The money was received by my Assistant Director to spend for my activity. When I was working, my manager called me to stop my project. I was so mad because I had spent a lot of time and money on it. The following day, I talked with her, but I did not get any solutions. Additionally, sometimes you have to take action and explain how the rejection is difficult to people who did not care about your project. Because of this experience then, I can solve any trouble that was with people who had a higher position at work than me.
When I came near to finishing my bachelor's degree in law, I had to do a project as a graduation requirement which was setting up a mock trial at Law College. I was so delighted and elated because this plan would be by students of Law. My Assistant Director gave me check for $1,800. So, I wrote a list of requirements. Also, I wrote about some places that I can find my requirements because I had a small budget to work with. In addition, I discussed with my Academic Supervisor to need a team who will work with my project. After that, I worked with my team for one month. We were overjoyed before my Assistant Director had called about rejecting my project. I felt so upset and unhappy it made me cry all night. Moreover, it was tough and harmful for me because I had to tell my team about what happened to our project. As you know, they were so joyful.
The following one week, I returned the money to my Assistant Director. Then, I thought about what I could solve it for this the problem. Suddenly, I had a great idea which I could write a letter to The General Director at Law College to explain what happened to me and my team
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 274, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... My Assistant Director gave me check for ,800. So, I wrote a list of requirements....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, then, as to, in addition, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29275362319 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60258543677 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501449275362 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8595787685 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.3181818182 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6818181818 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86363636364 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.083776221636 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272280663576 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385210194844 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734260641737 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271126905288 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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