Do u agree or disagree? People today spend much more time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like rather than doing things they should do.
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether people should spend more time on personal enjoyment activities rather than the obligation activities has received a great deal of attention. Although some may argue that the require activities are necessary for having good future, I as well as many others believe that by doing preference enjoyment activities people can find their talents. I am of the opinion that both of the mentioned viewpoints have their own merits and drawbacks, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, without a shadow of doubt, interest in every activity is vital. This means that favoring in a activity not only produce the necessitate intense of the work but also can create innovative moment in each fields. In addition, doing personal enjoyment things, people will be able to find their talents. For the purpose of the illustration, I have a cousin who was civil engineering and have a great interest in painting. She took a mush time on educating art rather than building construction as her major work. She established an exhibition and famous masters admired her painting works. She could find her talent in art an became a famous artist.
Furthermore, it is establish beyond the doubt that diversity is important for concentration. As a case in point, doing the same work routinely could degrade he creativity of people. Some people can regulate their mind during their enjoyable activities. According to a recent research conducted by a Japanese institution, people who spend time on their favorite entertainments among their work demonstrate more success in their job.
The last but not the least reason by which the claim is justified is that in this competitor world, one who have necessary proficiency can achieve more prosper job positions. In other words, the more spending time on obligatory skills, the more success on acquisition a suitable job will achieved. This axiomatic that spending too much time on enjoyment things cause disruption in learning necessary activities.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one can draw the conclusion that having time for enjoyment activities is important. Nonetheless, it should be stressed that this argument is not neglect the urgency of spending time to important works. Finally, it is worth bearing in mind that this is a controversial issue which needs to be further studied so as to provide conclusive results unanimously accepted by all specialists. Therefore, I suggest that more surveys and studies be conducted to enable us to answer this question more precisely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, in brief, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26066350711 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9518496135 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535545023697 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1883262916 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61904761905 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213078860283 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592520382725 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635228941722 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11631485674 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356367734123 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.