It is widely accepted that each society needs rules to flourish. As some people may hold the view that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict; however, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. As far as I am concerned, I personally agree with second belief. Among myriad reasons which can support my idea, I will delve into most conspicuous ones, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, chaotic wide world needs to attend especially by adopting the fair laws and rules, which makes lives easier. In my opinion, today's rules are based on our ancestors' experience which have modified during years. On the other hand, Law as like as other sciences have developed to the extend that more sophisticated advocates adopt rule. Thus, I personally think the rules are fairly enough and do not restrict young adults. An rule for young people is that it is prohibited to young adults to purchase alcoholic liquids such as beers, whiskey and vodka. An example about my friend illustrate benefit of this rule better. When we were 16 years old, my friend wanted to buy beer, but it is always against the law. Furthermore, he finally bought beers, and after drank it, he had had bad accidents which was threatened his health.
The second reason, one should take into account this significant that young people are lack of experience. By considering this, government could adopt the harsh laws to the extend that youth avoid to doing risky behaviors until they would gain knowledge and experience about certain circumstance. Beside of that, it encourages young people to broaden their horizon by getting experience from adults who have experienced the circumstances before. For instance, young people are prohibited to have a driver license until 18 years old and government have taught the young people should gain experience until 18 to drive.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples leads us to the conclusion that based on the today's lifestyle. Fair laws and lacking of experience of young people are two main reasons of my statement. Actually there are some other reasons and examples advocate the claim which is not mentioned above. By and large I highly recommend that young people must follow and obey rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, thus, for instance, such as, by and large, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99220779221 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55252133279 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579220779221 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1813142382 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281582286057 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787506295441 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875074971888 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172915863023 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810950362708 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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