do you agree or this agree that entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than what they have now
Privacy is one of the most required features that individuals need. Among the different groups of the society famous people suffer severely from lack of privacy. Some may believe that entertainers or athletes, that are among the celebrities, deserves more privacy than what they already have. Some people would disagree with this argument. However I agree that they need more privacy for a couple of reasons.
First, due to the fact that privacy is one of the basic and fundamental requirements that human being needs, celebrities don't deserve to be under scrutiny. All of the famous people are not apart from us. We all require sanctum. From social sanctums like a private room in our office that we work there to very personal sanctums like when we don't let any body to become very close to us. Hence, I guess they certainly don't like any body to get very close to them and hug them or so other annoying things the fans do. Moreover it would be true about they personal life like their settlement or relationships.
Second, by intruding so much in their private life, we are breaking the rules of respect. I think if we call ourselves "fans" we should at least respect them by not intruding in private parts of their life that is probably non of our business. In addition such intrusive behaviors can get them in trouble. For example I remember an interview of a famous athlete. He was unfortunately defining how his intrusive behavior of his fans had caused imbroglio for his wife. Thus because of this this imbroglio his wife had left him and he had lost all his life. This really taught me not to intrude in private life of not only the celebrities but also every one.
Consequently, famous and known people's basic rights like privacy should be respected. Because these are vital for human being even celebs. Moreover we should all be aware of the dramatic results of such intrusive behaviors on other's personal life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: believes
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Suggestion: Thus,
...fans had caused imbroglio for his wife. Thus because of this this imbroglio his wife...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
... are vital for human being even celebs. Moreover we should all be aware of the dramatic ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, thus, apart from, at least, for example, i guess, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81492537313 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57478909288 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1537051336 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8095238095 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9523809524 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149931086949 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449195874093 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865925793946 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101983361735 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122719754172 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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