Do you agree or disagree that famous should set a good example for Young people?
Famous people have the power to create a deep mark in an entire generation. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree that famous people must represent an adequate example for children. It is my firm belief that celebrities have a certain power over people, due the fact that they are famous and represents an idea of life most people desire to have.
Young people, specially children at the early stages of life are still developing their personality. It is in this stage that they are starting to see the world by their own eyes, which means, that normally they do not any type of power to block certain information that reach on them. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter, has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my grandfather used to smoke and he told me that everyone in his childhood used to smoke cigarettes as well. His parents, Family, friends and even television idols smoked at that time. As a result, he started to smoke when he was just a child because it made him fell cool, popular, and rebel just like those same celebrities from the television.
We are currently living in the digital era, which make it easier for us be in touch with celebrities and being able to interact with their lives. People tends to admire those who had achieved success, wealth and status, which is basically what constitutes a famous person. Due to this fact, most famous are considered as “digital influencers”, once their posts can reach millions of people. For this reason some brands pays for them to use a certain type of product or clothes, in order to sway people into buying that specific brand. Drawing from my own experience, when I was a child I was fascinated by Ayrton Senna. I used to beg for my parents to buy everything I could find with his famous “AS” logo, in this way I used to have simple items such as a pencil case, and expensive ones like his drowning suitcase. It is certainly clear to see how celebrities can influence our lives.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that famous people must set a good example for young people, due the fact children are easily manipulated and that people sees them as a model.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, well, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62278481013 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53611756923 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556962025316 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4717980633 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.411764706 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41176470588 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220196774257 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653456713862 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812389142975 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158408693551 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975427980124 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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