Do you agree or disagree with the following opinion? The most important goal of education is to help people educate themselves?

The modern world makes us to change our perceptions of the learning process. Most of people still think that the teacher is the most important part in education. However, in my point of view - to shift knowledge from professor to students – it isn’t the main target of education process and they should know how to learn themselves. And in the following essay I will explain the reasons.
First of all, as before, now the first step of education to teach everyone how to read, write and math. For what? Clearly, in order to the learning process isn’t limited by the time, that kids spend with the teacher. To give them an opportunity to read interesting book, to solve a tasks and write his thoughts and ideas. It is common knowledge, that progress has already moved to the point before singularity, but earlier, only two hundred years ago, most people haven’t had education at all. Shortage of money or their origin didn’t allow them to attend a school and especially an university. So, they educated themselves: made experiments, tried something new and fixed their conclusions. And now, when higher education became available to everyone, people should not be obsessed with work already done, they must move on. Because of that at universities, most part of the time is devoted to independent work of students - at home and in laboratories.
Second step in educational institution when students taught how to work with information. In my view, this part will be most helpful in our future. Nowadays most of people have an internet access, that is the whole University of information, on the other hand it usually represents a cooked-up things or only speculations. I don’t want to say, that all information in internet is a fake. But ability to analyze it and check sources of news or articles, help us look at all, what is happening in the world, based only on our judgments. For example, now we are the witnesses of new type of world war – Information war. The principle - is that the one, whom the majority will believe, will win. But the consequences will be real: real war, crash of economy and humans’ victims. And educated people should not believe everything that is written and in turn should help the majority understand the true motives of what is happening, this will save many lives.
By the way of conclusion, there is no doubt the education plays the key role in our life, more over life shows us that people aren’t usually choose right type of education and they can get success in another area. But if in the learning process they learned to educate on their own: to work with information, to make the right conclusions and experiments - they will easily learn something new.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...ur perceptions of the learning process. Most of people still think that the teacher is the mos...
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Line 2, column 595, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... them to attend a school and especially an university. So, they educated themselve...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...be most helpful in our future. Nowadays most of people have an internet access, that is the wh...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
... that people aren't usually choose right type of education and they can get succ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, so, still, for example, no doubt, by the way, first of all, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8669527897 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76356361223 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545064377682 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6619125241 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6086956522 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2608695652 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21796741614 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573713629156 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526655825337 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139572987886 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00908713921837 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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