Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education and occupation are the two most important stages in human life today. Any person spends several years to get educated, then almost the rest of his life in an occupation. The year students finish high school can be a merging point between these important stages when some students may try to find a job, whilst some others believe that it's better to continue education to get a university degree. I believe that any gap between education at the high school and university level can be damaging. there are two reasons why I subscribe to this idea which are separately elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, learning is a continuous process and any pause between its stages can weaken it. To explain more, I remark that starting again will be difficult if someone gets away from school-related issues like attending classes, doing homework, and giving exams. Evidently, these tasks need some effort and are not easy to do, but students after years of study get used to these tasks. So, if they rest one year without these onerous tasks or even work in another field without academic learning, it will be difficult for them to be back. Take a personal experience as an example, after I graduated with a bachelor's in engineering, I did not accept going on a master's level in hope of getting a job, becoming financially independent, and then starting to study for a master's. But, after several years working I forgot all the course materials. Consequently, it was really hard and unimaginable to think about studying again. these years of working and laziness resulted from, deprived me of improving in academic education.
Second, for a young man earning money is very charming, so engaging with work after high school can stop him on the same menial job forever. Obviously, there are lots of arguments between teenagers with their parents about monetary matters, like how much they take monthly or how to spend the money taken. Those disputes make the teenager very keen for self-independence unfortunately at the age that he can not understand the real value of some things like education. As a result, in case of a young man finding the opportunity to make money even in a hard laboring job, he will probably accept and this will deprive him of reaching to higher levels in society that he can go by his innate talents. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. After graduation, one of my friends proposed to me to work in the company that he was working for. I accepted the job proposal and start to work, but in a bad and unrelated position. years after that lots of my friends who were weaker than me in university grades, find fantastic jobs when I had stayed at the same place.
In conclusion, I strongly recommend that students continue their education without any stop since they are at risk of losing their interest or strength after some years working. A bad time chosen to start a career can ruin the future entirely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a master' or simply 'masters'?
Suggestion: a master; masters
...pendent, and then starting to study for a masters. But, after several years working I for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79607843137 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66693770249 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525490196078 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0403063913 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.347826087 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1739130435 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198490749624 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557913054692 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439277699714 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120146019533 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016651208984 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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