As education is increasingly highly valued when it comes to landing a job and climbing the social ladder, more and more emphasis is placed on university degrees and qualifications. Although attending college right after graduation seems to be a popular choice among high-schoolers in order to achieve those certificates as soon as possible, I believe taking a gap year can help tackle the problems of choosing wrong career paths resulted from it.
It is true there is a large percentage of students who apply to colleges without any specific goal or direction. A recent study suggests more than half of high-schoolers interviewed said they just wanted to enter college in order to avoid the pressure coming from their peers and parents. As a result, not all students can manage to get admitted to a good school or choose a major that is right for them. This comes at the expense of their own time and money. For example, my brother was a cheerful freshman in his first year at his new school. He was delighted and relieved to be able to study computer science, which is one of the most popular majors these days. However, as he got to dive deeper to the subject during his senior years, my brother realized he was not cut out for it. It was the lack of real life experience and self-understanding after high school graduation that led him to a career he can’t enjoy doing.
On the other hand, taking a year off is not a waste of time as believed by many students and their parents. In reality, by being active and eager to learn through work or travel, young students can obtain more incredible experiences than they would ever imagine. In many cases, high-schoolers who decided to have a gap year finding their passion even ended up having a successful career path of their own, without having to spend 4 years studying at a university. And even if they are not successful, during that one-year journey, students can be sure to gain a lot of knowledge about themselves, and thus be able to discover what major or pathway he should focus on later in his higher education. Either way, spending a whole year exploring the world and exploring oneself will only offer benefits for students who are looking for a way.
In conclusion, since a career path is a lifetime journey and university courses are not the only way to find it, students should not rush into it right away after graduation. Having some time off to travel and explore the real world will best prepare them for the biggest journey of their lives.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...an help tackle the problems of choosing wrong career paths resulted from it. It is...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in many cases, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69074492099 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65846952519 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557562076749 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7824167563 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.235294118 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0588235294 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179652193396 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580433578808 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262833116686 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106454344356 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301549878056 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...an help tackle the problems of choosing wrong career paths resulted from it. It is...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in many cases, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69074492099 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65846952519 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557562076749 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7824167563 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.235294118 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0588235294 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179652193396 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580433578808 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262833116686 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106454344356 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301549878056 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.