Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
When it comes to the issue the importance of making profits in the business, some people think that companies should do anything they can to make a profit. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I concerned, the last point carries more weight. I think that it would be better to look at some approaches for increasing profits and their consequences.
First at all, companies can hire inexperienced employees or second hand material for their producing. As we all know, profits depends on a two main factors, price and cost. In order to enhance profits, the companies always tend to decrease the cost of production. For achieve this, they may hire inexperienced employees, who needs less salary. In addition, they can use of second hand materials, which have less quality and expense, to produce their commodities. I admit these kinds of suggestion can help a company to gain profit, while in a long term; they will lose their customers, because of low quality. In addition, the scenario can be more horrible when the company produces wares, which relate people’s health.
A further point we must consider, the company can use of old technology, which are high- pollution, in the production line. In the modern countries, governments impose strict laws on industrial companies to use of new technologies, which are less pollution. These kinds of equipment usually are expensive, so it is possible that companies may tend to use of old machines, which are cheaper. Whereas, this approach will help them to decrease the cost of production and gain more profits, it will have many negative affects on the environment such as air pollution, ozone depletion, or even soil erosion. It never be logical to destroy the nature for making more money, because what the company gains is never compared with their
Apart from points I made above, the company can give false information to customer by using dishonest advertisement. For example, a company, who produces the toothpaste, can use of some movie actors for advertising. In an advertisement, the actors can speak about the positive effects of this production on people’s dental health, while none of them is near the trust. Although, this method for increasing the sales may in effective in a short time, sooner or later, they will lose their credits. Moreover, it can decrease people’s trust on the other advertisements and make difficult condition for other companies.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that companies should not do anything for increase their profits like hiring inexperience employees, using high-pollution equipment or false advertisements. All of these methods have numerous negative effects on people’s health, environment, or society. Last but not least I hope that companies gain the deeper insight that the aim of business is not just making money.
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- TOEFL T P O 20 Integrated Writing Task 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...ess pollution. These kinds of equipment usually are expensive, so it is possible that compa...
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Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be never
...one depletion, or even soil erosion. It never be logical to destroy the nature for makin...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...pletion, or even soil erosion. It never be logical to destroy the nature for makin...
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Line 5, column 728, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpany gains is never compared with their Apart from points I made above, the comp...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'whereas', 'while', 'apart from', 'even so', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247252747253 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.130036630037 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0934065934066 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.029304029304 0.046263068375 63% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0494505494505 0.0685040099705 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119047619048 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.018315018315 0.0351676179071 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92568295709 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021978021978 0.0309702414327 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0879120879121 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0384615384615 0.0209618222197 183% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.018315018315 0.0139019557991 132% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2881.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 465.0 408.028673835 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19569892473 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356989247312 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.29247311828 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221505376344 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144086021505 0.112833075102 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92568295709 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518279569892 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.4175039363 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2173913043 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3876743723 48.84282405 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.260869565 120.699889404 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2173913043 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.782608695652 0.644075263715 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 49.4647031323 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.84210526316 1.45489161554 127% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234081909821 0.300154397459 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0975979513744 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0666260708476 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.464467150048 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112882239992 0.151897553556 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829210495019 0.114077575197 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060210652343 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.329878001197 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0688954724996 0.067059652881 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158885472953 0.210909579961 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496438239688 0.0618886996521 80% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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