Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children rely too much on technology like computers, smart phones, and video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
The advancement of science and technology exerts profound influence on today’s life, which brings great convenience and amusement to us. However, the phenomenon that kids nowadays depend too much on the technology cannot be ignored, owing to the fact that addiction to technology may negatively affect their growth and development. It is reasonable to claim that there are more meaningful things for kids to do in their spare time, such as playing outside with friends of the same age as well as enjoying the simpler toys.
To begin with, children’s addiction to technology, especially being indulged in playing computer games, would do great harm to their health. It is not uncommon that many kids spend too much time playing computer games and then stay up late until midnight, which will inevitably influence their physical health. Long-time lack of sleep would make them feel sleepy frequently and cause them to be unable to concentrate on their studies. Also, researches have shown that those with inadequate sleep would be more likely to get irritated and commit unfriendly behaviors to others. So it is advisable that kids spend limited time on playing online games since indulgence would affect their studies, their interpersonal relationships with others as well as their health.
Additionally, devoting themselves exceedingly to technology such as smartphones and computers, which are filled with drug abuse, violence and crimes of the same kind, would inhibit the cultivation of a mentally healthy kid. As we all know, kids enjoy watching various videos and also cartoons on those electronic devices, while many of them contain inappropriate information that publicize some incorrect concepts. For example, in one of the most well-known cartoon series produced in our country, called a Happy Goat and an Evil Wolf, the wolf would constantly attempt to kill and eat the goats, while after failing, the wolf would come back in a second episode to make similar attempts again. In this case, the TV series seem to convey to the pupils that animals are eternal.
The bad effects that addiction to technology imposes on children’s physical and mental health should arouse parents’ alertness and concern, which should also provoke adults to adopt a more sensible way to help manage kids’ free time. To put it simply, motivate your kids to play with simpler while amusing toys and hang out with friends of the same age.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Children rely too much on technology like computers smart phones and video games for fun and entertainment Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children s developmen 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Children rely too much on technology like computers smart phones and video games for fun and entertainment Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children s developmen 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, second, so, then, well, while, for example, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19796954315 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6767205494 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58883248731 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.8691799559 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.285714286 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263974545972 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904480735869 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707786023091 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155007620907 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511797215393 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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