Every person in this world might agree on missing childhood. On the one hand, it creates a lot of memories of our friends playing with each other and having fun. On the other hand, we improve our abilities to pave a career path for ourselves. In my view, children should dedicate their childhood to education and playing rather than wasting time in performing routine tasks. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
First of all, education must be imperative for children rather than working in mundane household tasks. Our education structure had been established in a way to study at younger ages and then use this knowledge to earn money to live. So, this valuable time should not be wasted by performing daily chores because these humdrum tasks might consume a lot of time. Similarly, research also suggests that cognitive abilities decline with age. So for this reason, every child studies as hard as possible during those nascent stages. Although children must have to spend some time in doing the daily activities, they should not be confined to such insipid tasks. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. There is a family in my neighborhood with two children, the older kid had been forced to do some of the household work but the younger kid had provided with the freedom to study. Consequently, now, the older one has been earning dinky sums, though the younger one has got a lucrative job.
Secondly, every child should play as much as possible. Every adult realizes the value of childhood once he enters the dull routine life. With all the tensions once may face in adulthood, childhood is the only time to satiate by playing a lot. Moreover, it is one of the many ways for physical and mental fitness. Spending a lot of time might stray oneself away, nonetheless, every child should have fun and enjoyment at least for a minimum amount of time.
In conclusion, as mentioned above, childhood is the most precious period in anyone's life. Every person has the inherent compulsion to perform routine tasks later in life, but one could only have fun and proper education only in childhood. So instead of involving in such activities, children must spend time studying and playing which enables them to have a healthy and wealthy life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, at least, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85606060606 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52975734554 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535353535354 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.806501321 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4090909091 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13636363636 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207198719218 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056737215888 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056892175006 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118129340971 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515721945859 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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