Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Education children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technology have modified all facet of humankind life that contains adverse and beneficial effect. In fact, its’ negative effect are more tangible in the children’s education and parents face with a lot of problem to manage the children’s education plans. However, some group mentions to technology’s positive side on the education, other argues them due to difficulties that parents and teachers have. I am in favor of the idea which mentions to negative effect of technology on the education base on three points, increasing the new appeal devices, changing human values and life.
As a first reasons, modern devices have become an integral part of life devices like, laptop, cell phone and other smart electronic devices that present alluring facilities and environments for their user. Among companies competing with each other, children are more vulnerable too threats and harms. In other words, insufficient children’s wisdom make more problems for their education even cause addiction. Devices like cell phone or playing games diminish the students interest for education because they waste their energy for mentioned devices. For example, my brother was so weak on the school courses but when he abandoned playing computer games and cell phone, he made a significant progress in his lessons. As a result, technology reduce the children’s tendency for their courses by spending plenty of time for invaluable things.
As a second reason, technology make possible to get access to plenty of facilities and creating virtual persons and life, while in the reality children involve with different issues and problems which needs to manage and solve them. It means that it needs more energy and struggles. The youth can be a favorable person on the social network. Therefore, they think that they don’t need to efforts on the life out of social network. I can mention to my friend as a good example for this point, base on the spend more time on the cell phone and social network she lost many opportunities in the real life. Than time she was convince but after some years she could understand what happened to her life.
Consequently, I agree with the created problem by technology for children’s education due to some point, plenty of new and appealing devices and modifying the definition of real life
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...'s education and parents face with a lot of problem to manage the children's education...
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...evices, changing human values and life. As a first reasons, modern devic...
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Suggestion: significant progress
... computer games and cell phone, he made a significant progress in his lessons. As a result, technology...
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...lenty of time for invaluable things. As a second reason, technology make poss...
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... a good example for this point, base on the spend more time on the cell phone and social ...
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...st many opportunities in the real life. Than time she was convince but after some ye...
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...nderstand what happened to her life. Consequently, I agree with the created p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2328042328 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86674483928 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550264550265 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1579512062 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.352941176 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197105456329 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678091239951 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412599777089 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117825186884 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502108426613 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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