Family is an inextricable part of human life since many of us spend most of our time with our families. If it is asked the extended family is less important nowadays than before or not, due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to the great extent of conviction that our extended family becomes less important in our contemporary lives due to the two significant explanations.
The main reason is that technology has broadened our horizons. This means that because of new social media, that technology has provided us, the people have found many new friends and they communicate with them on behalf of their family. For example, when I was five years old my only friend was one of my cousins. We had to play with each other in their home, which was in our neighborhood, and we didn't have anything else to do. On the other hand, my son, which is six years old now, has more than twenty friends, whom he found on Instagram. As you can illustrate easily, My son couldn't have cultivated those relationships, if there is no technology available in our ongoing life.
Another reason is that people don't have sufficient time to spend with their family. In other words, due to the hardships of new crowded urban lives, the citizens don't have enough time to go to their grandparents' homes and this will lessen the importance of extended family. For instance, I remember, twenty years ago, we had to go to my grandma's home at least once a week and we had a lot of fun days in those spacious rooms. Furthermore, In those gatherings, all of the family could see each other and enjoy spending time talking about many things in the world. However, these traditions have been forgotten because every single person in these new crowded cities couldn't find a proper time to spend with his or her relatives.
To put the issue into perspective, in spite of the fact that some may think that the importance of the family hasn't changed, I believe that it has lessened on an enormous scale. Not only many new virtual friends, whom technology has found for us, superseded our extended family in our lives, but also people don't have ample time to spend with their relatives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, at least, for example, for instance, talking about, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66497461929 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57077408258 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.758204735 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.875 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139902098446 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511683398933 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030502444672 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922210796119 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032251491196 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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