Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people argue that joint family is less pivotal now a days than earlier time because of interfere of grandparents when not needed, lack of privacy, disagreements about how to bring up child, spoilt children as they are begin pampered by the aunts and uncles. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with these people for following two reasons.

First of all, big family are integral aspects of a modern society because they spark a close support structure and companion. For example, a research conducted by some master psychology student shows that a family members such as cousins, grandparents, aunts and uncles has a positive impacts in people's life and act as antidote to reduce stress and loneliness. In contrast person with lack of extended family provokes loneliness that is generally felt in nuclear family. It is essential to build close support structure and companionship in family because these are way to promotes happiness in this hectic mundane life. Thus, today, a gigantic family have huge beneficial impacts in people's life.

Secondly, joint family are becoming crucial part of contemporary period for better child care support. For example, one research study shows that multi-parenting by various adult family members not only takes some of the load off of working parents, but also helpful to learn practical life skills and exposure of child to innovative ideas and enhances their self-confidence. It is more important to have better child care because without good care children cannot develop their ability to tackle simple issues and their brain might not develop fully. That's why big family is significant aspects of modern life.

To sum up, the issue of whether extended family is important part of modern day is complex. Some have suggested that it has less priority now a days due to interfere of other family members. disagreement, danger of begin spoilt of children by excessive care. Nevertheless, I still contend that gargantuan family are crucial in this contemporary era for building close support structure and companion, and also for good child care.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...argue that joint family is less pivotal now a days than earlier time because of interfere ...
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Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...e that joint family is less pivotal now a days than earlier time because of interfere ...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: BEING_BEGIN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'being'?
Suggestion: being
...g up child, spoilt children as they are begin pampered by the aunts and uncles. Howev...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'begun'.
Suggestion: begun
...g up child, spoilt children as they are begin pampered by the aunts and uncles. Howev...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...ote to reduce stress and loneliness. In contrast person with lack of extended family pro...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ous adult family members not only takes some of the load off of working parents, but also h...
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Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...nd their brain might not develop fully. Thats why big family is significant aspects o...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ave suggested that it has less priority now a days due to interfere of other family member...
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Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Disagreement
...e to interfere of other family members. disagreement, danger of begin spoilt of children by ...
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Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: BEING_BEGIN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'being'?
Suggestion: being
...family members. disagreement, danger of begin spoilt of children by excessive care. N...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose support structure and companion, and also for good child care.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21238938053 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72937723508 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551622418879 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8829057193 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.45110844103 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163730376072 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585444409807 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338305799706 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108084277963 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367184023504 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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