:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Privacy-life should be guaranteed for a person to have peace in their life. The issue has initiated by emerging social media is how celebrities or famous athletes who have gotten their fame from these media and conditions, much privacy should have? Personally in the belief that they should have more privacy than now and only their news about their work allowed to distribute. I try to assert my opinion in the following essay.
First off, they should have human rights like every people. I know the privacy-life as a human right because I believe a person would be so anxious and nervous without privacy-life. This concept is visible in some celebrities who, after a while of their fame, can't control and provide a balance between their work and their privacy-life, hence they would be nervous afterward and show some odd manner which causes to decrease their fame. Generally, in the same situation, people should allow them to be alone for some while, respect their privacy, and not be persistent in being aware of a famous person's situation. This condition helps well-known to recover themself and be more successful in their work.
Secondly, I should mention that many celebrities have children, and children are not guilty of not be having privacy or peace because of their parents' lifestyle. Also, the parents should be in the situation far away from any stress to train their child correctly. I should remind again that the children are not guilty of having inappropriate nurture due to their parents' anxiety. It is obvious that some fans involve the children of a well-known person with their fame. This problem which creates a life without privacy-life can have adverse effects on the children's future.
In summary, Both the people and celebrities should seek to apart their private life from their work in order to stars like any ordinary people experience peacefulness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 364, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'distributing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: distributing
...nly their news about their work allowed to distribute. I try to assert my opinion in the foll...
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Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ities who, after a while of their fame, cant control and provide a balance between t...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'decreasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: decreasing
...d and show some odd manner which causes to decrease their fame. Generally, in the same situ...
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...e persistent in being aware of a famous persons situation. This condition helps well-kn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04153354633 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61782828628 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546325878594 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3201257219 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.2 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142496320017 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654665508249 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535674228375 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977334294077 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792054987426 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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