Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. I generally disagree with author's statement that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
First of all, people such as youth, are the backbone of any country. They define society. In this modernize world or a fast moving world, everybody is trying to cope with this fast moving world. Because they know, if they were able to cope with it, they will go through it otherwise they will get ignored. Therefore, people hardly get any leisure time to enjoy, if they get, they get caught into some other work. Anyone hardly enjoy their leisure time and spend time on personal enjoyment.
Further, it is also true that inventions of technology simply made our life more comfortable as it simply prevent us to do tedious work so that we can have more leisure time to spend it on personal enjoyment. but, it is actually not, it simply decreases physical work but not mental work. For e.g., last year when i was hired for a job in my city only but my daily schedule was so hectic that i hardly get any time to enjoy with my family or to peruse my hobby. From this circumstances, it is obvious that people hardly get time to spend in on personal enjoyment.
In addition, today's people are well educated and more matured. they are well known with their work. they knew very well that if they will not do what they require to do for well being they will get excluded from society.
Admittedly, it is sometimes good to spend much more time on personal enjoyment rather than doing what you should do. For e.g., in vacation period, vacation period is a type of me time or a family time and it should be dedicated completely to a family as we hardly get anytime to spend it with our family.it will simply distract you from your daily hectic schedules and will encourage you to spend time on personal enjoyment. As a result,it will simply provoke your mind which results into refreshment of mind and allow you to focus more on your work.
In conclusion, i firmly disagree with author's statement that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.as today's people are well educated and more matured. they are well known with their work. they knew very well that if they will not do what they require to do for well being they will get excluded from society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 428, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'Anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'enjoys'.
Suggestion: enjoys
...ght into some other work. Anyone hardly enjoy their leisure time and spend time on pe...
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Line 15, column 107, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'prevents'?
Suggestion: prevents
... our life more comfortable as it simply prevent us to do tedious work so that we can ha...
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Line 15, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...time to spend it on personal enjoyment. but, it is actually not, it simply decrease...
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Line 15, column 315, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...t mental work. For e.g., last year when i was hired for a job in my city only but...
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Line 15, column 468, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...h my family or to peruse my hobby. From this circumstances, it is obvious that peopl...
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Line 21, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ple are well educated and more matured. they are well known with their work. they kn...
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Line 21, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...d. they are well known with their work. they knew very well that if they will not do...
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Line 21, column 164, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...t if they will not do what they require to do for well being they will get excluded f...
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Line 27, column 437, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... time on personal enjoyment. As a result,it will simply provoke your mind which res...
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Line 33, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g things they should do.as todays people are well educated and more matured. they...
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Line 33, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...le are well educated and more matured. they are well known with their work. they kn...
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Line 33, column 277, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...d. they are well known with their work. they knew very well that if they will not do...
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Line 33, column 340, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...t if they will not do what they require to do for well being they will get excluded f...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, e.g., first, if, so, therefore, well, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73741794311 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40451831259 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.385120350109 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0393098449 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7619047619 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203981668442 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756493851185 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606074080527 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133614502385 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508260473618 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.