It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, attention to arts is very important issue for every country, arts shows different sides of that society and governments should give enough attention to arts. Some people have inclined toward the opinion that governments should spend more money on arts instead of sports and state-sponsored Olympic teams, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective, they believe sports is much important than arts. As far as I am concerned, arts are very important for every society and make culture of that country, so the government should give more attention to this matter. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first significant point to be mentioned is that arts and artists are very important for society and make many impressive effect on people of that country, arts make culture of every country and show this matter to other country. In addition different kind of arts make several effect on people, for example, music show different points of every country, and painting show others aspect of that society. Arts can show the world several aspect of any country, take my personal experience as a compelling example, I have a friend from other country and we meet at the university, when we met each other at the first time, he asked me to introduce some music and pieces of arts from my country, he want knew about my country and the culture of that, he also read some books about different arts, and in that moment I realize that arts of every country can speak about that country.
Another reasons, which should be taken into consideration, is that arts make good effect on people of society, and with that effect the future of country would be grate that any times. Hence, the government should spend more money on arts, they can add art and history lessen to high schools or add it as a extra course in universities, so students learn about different arts and see how much arts can be effective in society, with arts people become more cultured and make better society. For instance, when I was in high school our teacher showed different arts to us and encourage us to learn more about arts, after that I tried to learn about music and knew about history of music in my country, after a while I decided to start learning play piano, and nowadays I become a musician that I am very good at it.
In conclusion, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statements, one soon realizes that, arts are very important for society, and people of that society, so the government have to pay attention to this matter and spend more money on arts. With better society we make are future, and for having better society we should have better people with good culture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'several aspects'.
Suggestion: several aspects
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to play'
Suggestion: to play
...ter a while I decided to start learning play piano, and nowadays I become a musician...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7784679089 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52546580456 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409937888199 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.508256985 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 192.333333333 100.406767564 192% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.25 20.6045352989 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131058194764 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063519940921 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502952594678 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972526054307 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473725592626 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 11.7677419355 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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