Some people might think that art is more essential for society than sports, but I disagree with the statement that government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
First of all, athletics are likely to attract more people than arts. For example, I am a big fan of the local soccer club. Every time I go to the soccer stadium to watch the games, more than twenty thousands of spectators get together, which is a very exciting moment. On the other hand, when I went to the museum for the Yayoi Kusama's special exibition several years ago, I was surprised by that fact that the number of visitors was less than 10. Furthermore, I watch the highlighted video of the sport game on TV everyday, while I rarely watch art related contents on TV. These examples clearly state that athletics are more widely accepted than arts.
Secondly, sports have more economic impact on society than arts because sports sports activity involves many people. When the local sport team wins the big match, a lot of retailers and manufacturers typically start the special promotions to celebrate it. In addition, athletes and their fans tend to have a big celebration parade, which is beneficial for the local and the national economy. Also, people are willing to purchase sports goods such as caps and T-shirts, which means that a lot of company such as manufactures and retailers can gain profit. This means that sports are more influencial to our society than arts from economics point of view.
Lastly, sports have power to motivates fans to do some exercises. I went to see the NYC marathon two years ago. Before then, I didn't have a habit of running. However, that experience made me to start running regularly and now, running is one of my hobbies. More citizens exercise, the more active the society becomes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'twenty thousand'.
Suggestion: twenty thousand
...r stadium to watch the games, more than twenty thousands of spectators get together, which is a ver...
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Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ghlighted video of the sport game on TV everyday, while I rarely watch art related conte...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: sports
...mic impact on society than arts because sports sports activity involves many people. When the...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... marathon two years ago. Before then, I didnt have a habit of running. However, that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83540372671 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53783719847 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2079949863 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5882352941 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248235794663 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691556081361 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120934473968 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187038085714 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196318788691 0.0645574589148 304% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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