Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletic such as state-sponsored Olympic teams use specific reasons and example to support your answer
All around the world governments have a common goal which is making a better life standard for its people. They adopt different strategies to satisfy people. All individual are sensitive about their conditions and they care about the money that government spend. There has been numerous debate on how government’s budget should be spent and specifically should it be related to art subjects or it should be allocated to sport and athletic section. IT is correct that there are plenty benefits for strengthening the sport section, but in my opinion supporting arts would be more necessary, and I am going to elaborate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all artists contribute to the society more than any other filed and they are not supported sufficiently whatsoever. This is while all athletes and sports men are constantly supported by plenty sport companies like Adidas and Nike. Being a good artist required expensive life style, it needs many equipment, various workshops and expensive courses. With a closer look to history it can be seen that most of artists were dealing with poverty and they get ignored by governments and sponsors. Had not been neglected by governments, we would have benefited a totally progressed artistic society now.
Second of all artists define the culture and the personality of a country and their work is greatly precious. It can be almost guaranteed that if artists receive enough support they can play their role in shaping the personality of society successfully and bring the culture of society to a higher level. It is really hard to deny the role that art galleries, musics, movies and other parts of art play to shape the culture and the personality of a society. A beautiful song can be a remedy for a broken heart or an effective movie can change the mindset of a society to treat better towards immigrants.
And last but not least investing in art business can make a fortune. Monetary aspect is always important for governments and they would like to support the section that can increase the amount of invested money. Unites States could be a great example to substantiate this claim. Years ago they found out supporting art and artists should be done, consequently they established Hollywood and they never neglected the role of music, As a result American movies and song industry is taking over the world, their movies are seen by the people of the planet and their singers hold international tours and bring the money back to their homeland.
In conclusion supporting art and artists would be a better choice, artists are permanently suffering from lack of money and they are dealing with hard conditions throughout the life, while giant sport companies are big supporter of athletes. Moreover artists shape the society’s culture and investing on them is equal to have nicer people. And finally since money is really important these days investing on artist would pay back and would be totally worthy, so not only for a better country but also for a better world, it seems allocating more budget to art section is the right thing to do.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun equipment seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much equipment', 'a good deal of equipment'.
Suggestion: much equipment; a good deal of equipment
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the artists') or simply say ''most artists''.
Suggestion: most of the artists; most artists
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98087954111 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72952168609 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493307839388 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.284998565 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.047619048 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9047619048 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09523809524 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193428764808 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595548980468 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510491534686 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119020954596 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429575484679 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.