Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? I think there is too much violence in movies. Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
What people watch and hear profoundly impact their lives. Children and adolescents imitate what they see in their favorite TV shows. Different people have different responses to violent displays. I agree with the idea that movies contains too much violence.
First of all, movies portray violence, and some people are negatively affected to the point of sickness. Violence in movies causes people to have nightmare; thus, making them have unhealthy sleeping patterns. For example, my cousin used to watch Ninja movies before sleeping when he was 10. During the night, he would throw a sound of distress that he saw an Ninja in his bedroom and have insomnia as a result. His mental health was affected due to lack of sleep. Additionally, not everybody enjoys seeing violent scenes in movies. Some people are hunted by those specific scenes. For instance, since childhood, my younger brother hates movie because he is very sensitive to horror and violence shown in movies. He reports to me that those scenes make him uncomfortable when he is alone. Movies create bad pictures in people's minds, which will alter their mental health.
Second, people who watch violent movies tend to be violent themselves. In fact, because the types of TV programs people watch have a huge impact on their personalities, when a person watches violence, he or she is more likely to perform the same violence. In highschool, I had a colleague who loves Jean-Claude Van Dam's movies - his movies essentially consist in fight. Whenever my colleague was annoyed by any of us, he used to pronounce the names of karate terms he heard in the movies and perform the act of violence to harm whoever had done wrong to him willingly or not. Violence in movies has transformed him into a worse version of a person because his level of tolerance became too low.
In conclusion, there is too much violence in movies. The scenes of violence portrayed in movies affect the mental health of people as they hunt them into nightmares. Furthermore, watching violent movies pushes people subconsciously to act violently. Violent movies should be discouraged especially for children who are fearful of violent scenes. Also, parents should control the types of movies their children watch so that they do not fall in the category of violent children in front of their peers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01285347044 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61920786415 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52442159383 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.304548096 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.25 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2083333333 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 3.85842293907 492% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0746007471317 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338652812524 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669251386786 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564858576541 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213101847723 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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