Today, we live in a world where technology is an important part of our lives, and watching TV and movies is a common entertainment for youth and teenagers. On the other hand, economic gains are an important part of industries, and in my opinion, movies are lucrative industries that often are neckless about moral subjects. Movies are provided with the broadest possible effectiveness and often have violent subjects to have more audiences. Also, willing of a producer to invest in action movies is higher, and the producers will certainly enjoy the economic benefits. I agree with these sentences. There is too much violence in movies, and action movies have some disadvantages.
First of all, showing violent acts have short and long-term effects. Violence in the movie includes verbal, physical, sexual, and mental types. From my point of view, violence in movies exposes teenagers and youth to mental suffering and makes them feel aggressive. These affecting will show as disobedience. As well as, these movies cause un grasping OF situations. For example, my nephew has watched action movies for a long time, and now he can not control his anger and he has lost his concentration.
The second disadvantage that I would like to say is that actions movies suggest that violence is part of life, and in this way, the rate of crime will be increased. These movies strip juveniles of empathy sense and show that the world is empty of reliance. Teenagers are set aside from society, and as a result, it will lead to more ruination. For instance, the recent result indicates that in cities that present action movies, the rate of crime increased overwhelmingly.
To sum up, by taking all of the reasons mentioned above, I think violence is an undeniable part of today's movie action, and the people in charge should toughen up the law to prevent showing it.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Students do not respect their teachers as much as they did in the past 71
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96166134185 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71773271389 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571884984026 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7659912113 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3529411765 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147783687419 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521760082229 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501351873677 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089946463457 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330589520028 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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