I agree that people must have deeper knowledge about one particular subject but at the same time, I also believe people need to have basic knowledge about other subjects as well. There is a saying "Master of all is Master of none", it is proven that a single person cannot master all skills. In my opinion, people must try to master one subject which intrigue them more and try to spend minimal time in knowing other subjects as well.
Firstly, the reason why people should have deep knowledge in one subject is they become aware of the whole ecosystem of what they are dealing with. It is essential so when an unprecendented event happen in the subject then their indepth knowledge will help them to tackle it. For example, If I'm planning for a bike ride, I should not simply take my bike and start riding. I must spend substantial time to understand the condition of my bike and question myself like how often bike has been serviced, when was the last time the oil changed, etc. This deep knowledge helps me to have better control in my trip and this principle applies to all subjects. When you have deep knowledge in your domain, you can survive however the domain changes.
Secondly, there are situations where a subject could be influenced by outside factors other than domain factors. In such situation, broader perspective will help a lot to solve the problem. As I mentioned in the previous example, I should have deep knowledge about my bike before picking it up for a ride but that alone is not enough. I should analyse the route that I'm supposed to travel, availability of stay, weather, etc. If any of the above mentioned factors takes a swirl, I could not possibly know how my ride will turn out. If I did analyse the factors, I can plan accordingly where to stay or which route is less traffic or what to do when it rains suddenly and a lot more. That is why it is significant to have broader knowledge of the related domains.
In conclusion, as stated in the example, people should focus more on their core domain and should not leave out the outside factors that influence their domain and should have basic understanding of the outside environment as well. It is safer to have deep understanding of a particular subject and broader knowledge in the relevant subjects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67487684729 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56200261705 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480295566502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8444190186 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.444444444 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219303662989 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071635290874 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701266546478 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13411888122 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468495729923 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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