Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young.
In the history of human, it is the spirit of taking risk and exploring new things that ensure the development and prosperity of the society, increasing the living standard of people and invent thousands of equipment and products. When it comes to what kind of people are more suitable to take risk and explore new things, there is a controversy among people, some people hold the standpoint that older people are more suitable because of fruitful experience they have, on contrast, I prefer the young people, since their sense of confidence and enterprise and the positive attitude towards failure.
To begin with, it is well-known that young people especially the teenagers are relatively confident and ambitious to research unknown fields and they are willing to set great goals, sparing no effect to achieve them. However, old people are accustomed to think too much and don't dare to try new things which will definitely restrain their creativity and imagination. Most of the significant achievement are accomplished by young people rather than by old people in the history. To be specific, Ma yun, the most successful business man in China, construct his company in his twenties. Unlike some old business man who is very conservative, Ma yun put his main energy and finance on the development of online business, which is not considered as a promising direction at first in China. It is the confidence and encouragement as a young person that help Ma yun make such an important decision. Therefore, confidence and enterprise are the most valuable personalities which belongs to young people and play an essential part in the process of exploring new fields and taking risk.
In additionally, no one can avoid failure during the process of exploring new fields and taking risk and to be positive is very important. When encountering with challenge and failure, old people are used to complain and be negative while young people always can be positive and reflect on the failure to ensure they will not make the same mistake again. Take Edison as a instance, during the process of inventing a bibe, He failed unaccountable times, however his confidence never waned during the process of finding a suitable material for lamp bulb. Even after thousands of failure he still maintain a positive attitude and finally he succeed. Thus, since young people are more positive, they are more suitable.
Admittedly, old people have more experience which can offer assistant when confronting with difficult problem , however I think it is the sense of enterprise and confidence that play the most important role in the exploring of our world. Based on the discussion, it is wise to think that young people are more suitable to take risk and explore new things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in addition, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05043859649 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76897520537 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475877192982 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5222020189 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.9375 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163896097452 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618641307483 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480766260818 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119971423969 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315692619547 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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