Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
We live in the age of information and technology. This era provides us numerous medium for gaining information and data from all around the globe. Some believe that we should not pay attention to the events which will not have direct effect on our daily lives. However, from my vantage point, it is important to know about different issues happening around the world because after all we are all humans, and with paying attention to different phenomena we can boost our knowledge.
First and foremost, from the philanthropic side, we are all human and we should pay attention to various international events. Once in a while, catastrophic events such as earthquake, flood, famine, and so forth may happen around the world. These tragic events may not directly have impact on our lives, but we should pay attention to them. We are all human after all, so we should help other nations in cases of emergency. With knowing about the latest event through the Internet, newspaper, television, social media, and so on, we can become informed about such appalling events and make proper decisions to help them. As a prominent Iranian proverb says "all humans came from the same essence, so we are like the parts of a whole body". Thus, we should become well-informed about event around the world and use our humanitarian sense to help them during the hard times. Hence, the more we gain information about events, the better we can help other people during their hardships.
Furthermore, by paying attention to latest events happening around the world we can heighten our knowledge. All of us agree that knowledge is the foundation of power. To acquire this power in our modern era, we must know about global events. Knowing related or non-related issues from around the globe provide us a lot of practical data. As a result, we can use them in our daily lives. For instance, should we pay attention to latest news about computer technology, medicine, automobile industry, and so on, we can raise our knowledge in those fields. Also we can get in touch with those people and bring these novel technologies to our countries. Recently conducted research shows that people paying more attention to events happening around the world are more capable of inventing new things. We may have some ground knowledge about a matter, but we could not produce anything new because we do not have all the information we need. Hence, with getting the latest news about various events around the world especially in our field of interest, we can combine it with our knowledge and bring about something precious. Thus, the more we obtain information from events around the world, the better chance we have to fortify our knowledge.
All in all, although some people may believe that we live in a hard era, and we just should pay attention to our local problems and combine our regional forces to solve them, I believe that as Bill Gates said "we live in a global village", so it is important to know about different people problems and what is happening around the world. With knowing about these events not only can we become more informed, but also we can help them in the cases of emergency.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the latest'.
Suggestion: to the latest
...hips. Furthermore, by paying attention to latest events happening around the world we ca...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the latest'.
Suggestion: to the latest
.... For instance, should we pay attention to latest news about computer technology, medicin...
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Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...an raise our knowledge in those fields. Also we can get in touch with those people a...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'solving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: solving
...roblems and combine our regional forces to solve them, I believe that as Bill Gates said...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, after all, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 544.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86580882353 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56873437219 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415441176471 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3527505496 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.88 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.76 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164777606387 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673295787861 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050182153914 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132241289334 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187634841479 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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