Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
it goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world we live in, there are myriad amount of events happen which might either have enormous influence on people's life or lack of any impacts. In this vein, some people believe that being informed about this events is necessary even though they don't have any effects on their life, while others hold the opposite view point and are reluctant about knowing about this news. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that people should be aware of what happens around the universe, no matter it influences on their life or not. In the following paragraphs, I will explore my view-point on this issue.
To begin with, when someone knows what happens in the world, he is more likely to become well-awared of upcoming events and prevent some harmful disaster. If people are inclined to be informed about the incidents around the world, they will be unable to anticipate the events that might happen for them one day. For instance, last year there was a huge earthquake in east of Iran. A month before this catastrophic accident, there was a breaking news about how some tectonic plates around the neighboring areas had changed their shapes and directions. having announced about this news made people be more well-awarded and well-prepared for upcomming events. Many people strengthen their houses' structure and avoided lost of finacial losts.
Another equally important reason to be mentioned is that by being announced about the events all over the globe, people can be more knowledgeable and enrich their information about numerous up-to-date topics to be used in the proper time. For one thing, my father used to watch political news and always followed documentaries about politicians and their role in the world's progress. one day, there was a contest on this issue in our town. having been engaging with all political issues around the world, my father could be able to be the first who knew more information about this issue and won the contest. Had not followed the political events around the world, he could not have been such a proud for our family.
To put it breifly, contemplating all reasons and examples, one can realize that despite the fact that some events are unrelated to us, we should follow them and start knowing about their details. I think so because it not only would help people to prevent some losts and stay safe,but also it assists them to use their information in the cases they require thorough knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, well, while, for instance, i think, for one thing, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89411764706 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51473828668 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531764705882 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0859242061 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.352941176 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1969911019 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687232536574 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451311917153 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128702590753 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022243737359 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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