Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together.
Technology advancements have influenced all aspects of human life. While these developments have improved the quality of living in some areas such as individuals' health, there are other detrimental effects in other realms, including culture. I strongly agree with the idea that technology improvement has caused the emergence of situations that some traditional cultures have been missed. I will elaborate on the reasons why I feel this way in the following essay.
To begin with, the development of technology has revolutionized communications. Expanding telecommunication media such as television programs has familiarized individuals with the lifestyle of people living in other parts of the world, and the invention of the internet has connected those people with different cultures. As a result, spreading the traditions of one society to another has caused forgetting inherent customs of one region, supplanting with foreigner's cultures. Wedding ceremonies are a good example demonstrating this reality. About 20 years ago, in my country, weddings had been held in different ways. The bride and groom were riding on a white horse around their neighborhood, teenagers standing on the roof slowly were throwing red apples into their riding way as a sign of good luck, people were pouring sweets and candies on behalf of the sweetness of their future lives, to name but a few. Nevertheless, becoming familiar with other people's wedding ceremonies through watching television documentaries made them disremember all those traditions. Nowadays, people of my country ignoring their cultures hold their feasts in forums without most of the abovementioned customs.
Second, the rise of many facilities due to technological advancements have taken away the opportunity of thinking and performing the traditions of their ancestors. For instance, in the past some nights when people were returning from their works, all the family members were gathering at elders house listening to folktales and myths of previous times. Consequently, all generations were hearing about their local traditions. On the other hand, today individuals come home after a long boring workday sitting in front of televisions, and entertain themselves with various programs. Also, youngsters after finishing school hours are running to homes to get to their computer games and mobile phones. As a result, there is no time left for talking about traditions, and after some years they are forgotten.
In conclusion, I believe that people every day are losing parts of their traditional cultures because of technological advancements. These advancements have brought people some communication facilities that aware them of the customs of other regions and made mixing cultures possible. Additionally, the invention of entertainment tools such as computers and smartphones deprived the chance of talking to the next generation about the past cultures between parents and kids.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is inevitable that as technology advances traditional cultures will be lost It seems that we cannot have these two things together 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is inevitable that as technology advances traditional cultures will be lost It seems that we cannot have these two things together 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...us times. Consequently, all generations were hearing about their local traditions. On the ot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, talking about, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58258928571 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09525946865 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564732142857 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8334852671 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.095238095 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150935761673 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509885074613 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538599714485 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112031648679 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640651441984 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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