Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

By and large, having a timing scheduler plan in a company play a crucial role in efficiency. Some proponents acclaim that working few hours in each day reach to increasing yield of people. While most scientist advocate this idea, I strongly believe that having more free time help employee to work better. In the following paragraph, I will elaborate on my view point through two noticeable reasons.
First of all, have a good pastime could increase productivity of employees. Some days for excellent leisure time give people the encourage to perform better, because if they have a mistake or do their duties slowly, they should work more to compensate their faults. So it is a good purpose for decreasing the fault. My own experience demonstrates this concept. I worked in a firm which laborer perform jobs very slowly. While at first glance it seems they worked in atmosphere with lack of stress, almost most of orders didn’t until the deadline. Not only that, but workers had some mistakes in their duties because they had not good leisure times so couldn’t focus. After consulting with some managers, we decided to arrange new scheduler time for company which include more free days. So time management in company has significant effect on employees.
A second point is that, I think having a major free time can be a good opportunity for enhancing skills. In the modern world with advancing technologies day by day, developing skills and learning new adverting equipment and methods are necessary to work well in a group. Experience of my friend prove this claim. He was manager of the electronic company that work on embedded systems. In some years advances in electronic circuits accelerates, so many company which couldn’t adapt with this situation became burst. My friend decided to dedicate two days of week for investigation on new methods and walking edge of science. Although their productivity decreased a little, but they can survive from that catastrophic circumstance that many company compelled to close the doors.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that companies should dedicate more leisure time for their employees to increase their efficiency at work. Providing more free time could be an enormous occasion for workers to improve their knowledge and proficiency which is vital in the modern world.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 126, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... for excellent leisure time give people the encourage to perform better, because if they have...
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Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'performing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: performing
... leisure time give people the encourage to perform better, because if they have a mistake ...
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Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the orders') or simply say ''most orders''.
Suggestion: most of the orders; most orders
... atmosphere with lack of stress, almost most of orders didn't until the deadline. Not onl...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun company seems to be countable; consider using: 'many companies'.
Suggestion: many companies
... in electronic circuits accelerates, so many company which couldn't adapt with this sit...
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Line 3, column 740, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun company seems to be countable; consider using: 'many companies'.
Suggestion: many companies
...rom that catastrophic circumstance that many company compelled to close the doors. In con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, while, i think, in conclusion, by and large, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1469816273 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78243696854 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556430446194 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8354310915 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1363636364 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3181818182 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190986448433 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566537436562 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422544246352 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12272674004 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226774089529 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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