Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or a new country because they will lose their friends

Nowadays, people are spending a vast amount of their time with their friends. In this regard, ‎some individuals believe that moving to a new town or country is not a good decision because ‎people lose their old friends, while others hold the opposite supposition, stating that people will ‎not lose their old friends by going to another city for living. When it comes to me, I concur with ‎the former group. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint with two specific reasons. ‎

‎ First of all, people who move to a new place make new friends, which causes them to lose old ‎ones. To be more specific, when people go to a new place, they tend to find new friends in ‎order to escape from loneliness. Whenever people find new companions, they are more ‎interested in their new friends because these new persons have different personalities and ‎traits from their old friends. As a result, the new friends are more exciting to people, which ‎cause persons to spend more time with them and be encouraged to know them better. In this ‎situation, no place will remain for old friends, and they will be forgotten by the new friends' ‎attractiveness.

‎ Secondly, by replacing to a new town or country, people spend less time with their old friends, ‎which causes them to lose their old companions. To elucidate, people and their old friends ‎spend a vast amount of time with each other when they lived in one place, but after moving to ‎a new place, they cannot spend the same amount of time with each other, so after a while, they ‎will forget their old friends. My personal experience may shed more light on this matter. I had ‎an old friend, Mary when I lived in Gonbad. We saw each other every day in school and spent a ‎great amount of time with each other. Also, we went to different places in the town in the ‎summers, when we did not go to school. But, after high school, I had to go to Tehran for my ‎education, and she remained in Gonbad. unfortunately, I lost my old friend because I could not ‎spend time with her. Had I stayed in Gonbad, I would not have lost my old friend.

‎ In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I firmly believe that it is not a good idea to ‎move to a new place because old friends will be lost. Not only, do people make new friends, but ‎also they spend less time with their old friends, which causes them to lose them. ‎

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5871559633 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50855366928 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438073394495 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0216431077 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367647789729 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131762017057 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095913180901 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29090066062 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560682994 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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