Nowadays, people are spending a vast amount of their time with their friends. In this regard, some individuals believe that moving to a new town or country is not a good decision because people lose their old friends, while others hold the opposite supposition, stating that people will not lose their old friends by going to another city for living. When it comes to me, I concur with the former group. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint with two specific reasons.
First of all, people who move to a new place make new friends, which causes them to lose old ones. To be more specific, when people go to a new place, they tend to find new friends in order to escape from loneliness. Whenever people find new companions, they are more interested in their new friends because these new persons have different personalities and traits from their old friends. As a result, the new friends are more exciting to people, which cause persons to spend more time with them and be encouraged to know them better. In this situation, no place will remain for old friends, and they will be forgotten by the new friends' attractiveness.
Secondly, by replacing to a new town or country, people spend less time with their old friends, which causes them to lose their old companions. To elucidate, people and their old friends spend a vast amount of time with each other when they lived in one place, but after moving to a new place, they cannot spend the same amount of time with each other, so after a while, they will forget their old friends. My personal experience may shed more light on this matter. I had an old friend, Mary when I lived in Gonbad. We saw each other every day in school and spent a great amount of time with each other. Also, we went to different places in the town in the summers, when we did not go to school. But, after high school, I had to go to Tehran for my education, and she remained in Gonbad. unfortunately, I lost my old friend because I could not spend time with her. Had I stayed in Gonbad, I would not have lost my old friend.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I firmly believe that it is not a good idea to move to a new place because old friends will be lost. Not only, do people make new friends, but also they spend less time with their old friends, which causes them to lose them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5871559633 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50855366928 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438073394495 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0216431077 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367647789729 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131762017057 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095913180901 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29090066062 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560682994 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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