Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There might be some people who believe that 20th century is comfortable than modern society. However I personally disagree with the above idea with the two subsequent reasons.
Firstly, communication becomes fast. In the past, the only way to communicate with people who are living in the far away is writing letter. Moreover the time between the sending letter and taking letter take tremendous time. However, the developed technology make it possible to communicate immediately with distant people. Let me bring up my personal experience as an example. When I was a child, it was hard to call my father when he went to the another country to work. So we had to wait him until he arrived at the airport. However, we can receive an answer immediately when we ask him some question if he is in the another country these days. As understood from my experience, thanks to speedy communicating by modern technology, life becomes more comfortable.
Secondly, the infrastructures for children are increasing. In this complex, raising their child has been considered as one of the most hard task in one’s life. Lack of the social activity when they are still children, children could be hard to bear their future social activity. In this situation, many structure for developing children’s various ability for social activity are increasing such as fair to experience the various careers. More over according to a study executed by social department of the Soul National University which is the most prestigious institution in South Korea, the number of the fair for children is yearly increasing. Thanks to increasing fair, parents don’t have to try finding the fair for children hardly. As understood from this survey, easy approach to the exhibition for children make it easy to raise children these days.
In conclusion, communicating with people who are living far away and raising children become easy in this modern society. In this regard. modern society is still easier to live than the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
...ury is comfortable than modern society. However I personally disagree with the above id...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...ving in the far away is writing letter. Moreover the time between the sending letter and...
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Suggestion: many structures
...ure social activity. In this situation, many structure for developing children's various ...
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Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...ve to try finding the fair for children hardly. As understood from this survey, easy a...
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Suggestion: Modern
...in this modern society. In this regard. modern society is still easier to live than th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1367781155 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8645670857 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562310030395 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0584303633 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4761904762 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138357745032 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392469043292 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304087887175 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851885429304 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142756242812 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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