Some people think that advertisements make products better than they actually are. They think in this way because in advertisements products are over-exaggerated. Personally, I also agree with this statement. Whenever I see an advertisement I feel that someone try to cheat people by promising something impossible.
First of all, advertisements use disputed stories and information. Let’s say you are watching a chocolate advertisement on tv. You know that chocolate is a moderate one. But it is shown very differently on tv. If you don’t know that chocolate before, you will probably think it is really different from other cholates. But because you know it, you feel you are cheated.
Another point that can be a reason for my thought is my experiences. Whenever I see a vacation hotel advertisement I search for that hotel from websites where I can see customer experiences. After I read some comments and check pictures of the same hotel I realize that everything in the advertisement is the opposite. Sometimes I can’t find time to control the information in the advertisement and I go to them without doing this, I am disappointed with my choice.
Lastly, watching some videos about tricks of advertisements may affect my idea about the issue. In such videos, it is shown that especially in ads about foods strange things are used to make the product seen better. For instance, instead of chocolate on a cake some synthetic items may be used. Or, instead of a hamburger meet, another irrelevant item can be used. After I watch this video and see a lot of tricks like this, it is impossible for me to think that the products seen in the ads are similar to the real ones.
To conclude, there are a lot of tricks in ads that show the product much better than they are. That is why I can say, ads are not good instruments that can be used while it is investigated a product before purchase.
- TOEFL T P O 24 Integrated Writing Task
- In the United States it had been common practice since the late 1980s not to suppress natural forest fires The quot let it burn quot policy assumed that forest fires would burn themselves out quickly without causing much damage However in the summe 60
- In the past century the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States birds in particular Unfortunately for birds these trends are likely to 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: OVER_EXAGGERATED[2]
Message: Use simply 'exaggerated'.
Suggestion: exaggerated
... because in advertisements products are over-exaggerated. Personally, I also agree with this sta...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whenever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ally, I also agree with this statement. Whenever I see an advertisement I feel that some...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, lastly, may, really, so, while, for instance, i feel, you know, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81762917933 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0022826163 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501519756839 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5788239068 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4761904762 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222168903883 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682685348567 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528274195469 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121322219645 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505621964359 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.