Do you agree or Disagree with the following Statement? Nowadays, young people do Not give enough Time to Helping Their Communities. Use specific examples and Reasons to Support your answer.
In my opinion, I agree with the statement that young people today are not contributing enough to helping their communities. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, the time constraints that pressure the youth to focus on improving their own skills rather than volunteering is a major factor in this issue. In the past, people had more free time after their full-time job or school and they were able to give a hand in a social activity around their neighbourhood. However, nowadays, with the rise of automation and the huge losses in the number of jobs that require little or no skills such as factory and manufacturing jobs, young people are trying to make use of every single moment to acquire a new skill or hone another to be more competitive in the future. This race to guarantee an adequate position consumes youngsters' time and energy and hence, they end up with no time left to offer help for their society.
Secondly, the willingness of young people to participate in unpaid work has been weakened since most companies no longer recognize these activities as something positive. Instead, most organizations now would opt for whoever would do the assigned tasks best. In addition, financial obligations, such as rent and education loans, demand most students to at least work a part-time job if not a full-time one, which makes it extremely hard for them to provide some of their spare time to developing their community. Moreover, new technologies like smartphones and other devices are so tempting to young people that they are not able to put it aside and go for a public park cleaning event, for example. As a result, youngsters would prefer to have an online conversation with a friend or even play a game or any other entertaining activity in their leisure time, if they have any, than to devote any hours to assist in their community.
To sum up, I am with the view that the youth in the modern era are not giving some of their time to helping their local community. This is mainly due to the fact that young people today have more on their plates than ever before and most of the time, they would choose to invest their time to better themselves.
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...invest their time to better themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, at least, for example, i feel, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74615384615 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61312119253 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0757903961 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.384615385 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274413312497 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103727093838 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778206528854 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188197797134 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445392598617 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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