Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Influencers have great impacts on our lives. They try to pursue people in many aspects as they advertise to many things through social media. Therefore, I agree that the opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people. This is due to the fact that their brains still developing, and they try to show off more than older people.
To begin with, youngsters tend to believe the opinion of famous people more than older people because their brains are still developing. In fact, studies show that human brains stop developing at the age of eighteenth. So, young people think that what they see in social media is real and these people have great lives; therefore, they try to imitate and do whatever these celebrities say or do in order to have great lives as their icons. For instance, a teenager can copy Kim Kardashian in everything she does just and follow her in every social media application just to be able to have the same amount of her money. She does that without realizing that kis is paid for most of the things she does on social media just to pursue other people to do the same as she does. On the other hand, most adult people realize how celebs work is done, and they do not pay much of attention to their fake lives. Thus, teenagers are more influenced by celebrities than older people.
Another reason why I support the statement is that most of the young people like to show off in front of their friends. Indeed, teenagers are challenging each other who can have a more similar look to their icons. For example, if an influencer on Instagram cut his hair in a certain way, many teenagers try to make the same hair cut and challenge each other who has the exact same hair cut. However, most of the adults do not take the opinion of others into their consideration and do whatever makes them happy even if it is not trendy. Hense, celebrities' opinion is more important to younger people than older ones.
For the aforementioned reasons, I strongly agree with the statement that youngsters pay more attention to famous people's opinions than older people do. Hopefully, we can see more awareness about how bad empty influencers can affect young people's lives in order to have a more mature community in the future.
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- TPO 27 integrated essay 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 68
- TPO 21 integrated writing 85
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statements Because people are busy doing so many different things they do very few things well Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 74
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65508684864 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40987517372 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456575682382 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0535483403 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.222222222 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339971706424 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135378626687 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132383265402 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23722669597 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390011540114 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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