It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, famous people such as actors, entertainment, and athletes are very important for society because they can be very effective on people and in some cases, they can make some changes in everybody's life. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that celebrities are more important than older people to younger people, and they can make an effect on younger people, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, the opinions of famous people can be very effective for younger people, because they can connect to younger people in modern ways. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first significant point to be mentioned is those young people like celebrities and follow them on social media, they watch famous people's lives and want to live like them, or be successful like them, so they repedet active with them and in these circumstances, famous people can be very effective in younger people life. Also, young people do not like to older people advise them, and refute their opinion in most situations. In addition, younger people see celebrities as a pattern for their lives, so the opinion of famous people is very impressive to younger people and they should manage their behavior. For instance, famous people such as actors should think about what they say or what they do, because younger people monitor them in every situation and they have to be a good pattern for future generations.
Another reason, which should be taken into consideration, is that young people feel close to celebrities, especially whit young celebrities because they see each other at the same age and follow them in everything. On the other hand, young people do not feel close to older people, because they are from different generations, and most of the time young people have this feeling that older people such as their parents do not understand them in some situations, so this is very normal for them to follow celebrities and take their opinion seriously. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; I remembered when I was younger, I followed some celebrities on social made and liked them very much, on that time my parents wanted me to become a doctor in my personal life, but I was obsessed with some actor and I want to become actors, exactly like him, I chose him as my pattern and my parent's opinion were not important for me, at last, I chose art in university, and became an actress, so it was not bad for me to listen to my hero in my personal life.
In conclusion, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that the effect of celebrities on society, especially on younger people is deniable, so this is a significant responsibility for celebrities to be careful about what they say and what they do because their opinion is very important to young people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8630952381 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71965191142 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.400793650794 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.654748425 48.9658058833 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 204.25 100.406767564 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.0 20.6045352989 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340122259754 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168404973925 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746386424523 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232537401379 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592516358425 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 11.7677419355 191% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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