Do you agree or disagree with the following statement “ In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.” Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement “ In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.” Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

I’ve agreed with this idea that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. In this essay, I want to describe my idea, with tree reasons which include, a transfer of experiences to children to manage money, an independent person and the value of money, a long-term plan for their lives.
I’ve agreed with this idea that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. In this essay, I want to describe my idea, with tree reasons which include, a transfer of experiences to children to manage money, an independent person and the value of money, a long-term plan for their lives.
First, one of the most important things during life is the issue of transfer experiences from parents to children. Some experiences that be used for children contain the management in their money. In the case of finance, parents usually are responsible for the economy of a family then they must know how they spend money. For instance, families usually balance between costs and incomes, they should teach to children how they buy and save the rest of their money. Eventually, parents will manage the budget of their family in the future.
Second, on the one hand, children like to have entertainment when they are at a young age, they waste so much their money. For example, in the pastime when I was a child, I saved my money for three years. I decided to buy some toys for playing with my friends but after I played several times with my friends I threw my toys away, therefore, I lost all of my money. On the other hand, children like to become independent in their lives either they have a lot of money or don’t have money. Therefore, if parents learn to children that they save money, they will decide about their money without helping others in the future and they will decide independently.
Third, I believe that children should learn to manage their own money to learn two important things. One thing is that if they know how to use their own money, they will struggle to think about other problems in their lives. Another thing is that children can make a long-termed plan that is so important for children. Therefore, they learn to keep their lives in the best way.
In conclusion, finance and economy are so significant for families, who want to challenge with economic problems such as inflation, economic and financial crisis, unemployed in the world. As a result, parents must prepare their children to save money and to manage their expenses. Children can not have a long-term plan and they should learn that don’t lose their own money because it causes to lose every opportunity for investigation in their lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 398, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: losing
... lose their own money because it causes to lose every opportunity for investigation in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, another thing, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7650862069 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49889894749 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.379310344828 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3266870884 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309232805663 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137143989852 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125125028814 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221288347856 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780754665462 0.0645574589148 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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