Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
These days, people have various types of concerns in their life. Someones think people spend most of their time on personal enjoyments without paying enough attention to their duties. In contrast, in my opinion, people are often trying for their jobs and the different roles that they have in society. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, in sophisticated modern life people follow their professional goals, and majority of the time they leave their hometown in search of a better career or gain a highly qualified education. So, this situation forces them to be independent of their family and friends who they are far from now . Actually, they have a lot of duties for doing themselves without any help. For instance, my older sister and her family were living with us last year and my mother assisted her in caring for her children. Then my sister was free for going out with her friend but now her family has relocated to another city for a better job and she has to keep her children because my mother is not with her and she cannot do some personal enjoyments.
Besides, nowadays people work a lot and they don’t have enough time for their interests because they are frequently competing for their professions and other positions in society. We can witness this situation by seeing their lifestyles. Consuming junk foods and shopping online show us that they have not enough time like as our parent had in the past. For example, I love to know and study art history. So I want to visit all the galleries and museums in my city. But in the last two years, I have not had enough time for that. Because I am a busy engineer and my responsibilities require me to work longer and longer hours even my weekends.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people spend most of their time on their work and serious tasks. This is because usually, they have many works to do. Also, their job’s concerns don’t let them find free time for their personal entertainment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66386554622 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4753473801 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53781512605 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3322727045 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6315789474 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144131484247 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534906351249 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500026390544 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109106716258 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286386698831 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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