Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Practice and hard work are more important to an athlete's success than natural ability and talent. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important to train for an athlete to enhance his abilities. Personally, I believe that hard work would give you the opportunity to achieve everything you want. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, natural abilities without exhausted training are nothing. The talent is not an option to get success to perform as a famous athlete. When you come home and you are so tired after training that you cannot even keep the fork in your hand, it is a sign of your hard work and future achievements. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About five years ago, my main sport activity was playing football. While doing this sport, I met loads of different players in my team, including natural talented or not. Everyone wished to be in the first time, so each player of the team did their best to show the trainer that you were worth playing in the main team. As a result, it created a feeling of competence, so everybody was motivated as much as the natural talent did not play any significant role when the trainer chose the players to play in the first team.
Secondly, the abilities that someone has received from birth, you could get by training. A person, who is more talented than you, just has more abilities and more chances to get success but it should not restrict you. During physical training, the athlete is running more and more rapidly, so it is not a trouble to sprint faster than the talented one. Hard work pays off. For example, Usain Bolt is a multiple champion of Olympiad games who has set a new record time of running one hundred meters. I was shocked when I watched loads of his training videos. Usain spends a huge part of his day by doing a gym or running in the field despite the weather or his physical fatigue. I think that it is an example of the real champion who is ready for everything to wear one more gold medal. Consequently, he shows us that shocking abilities could be got by everyone, even by an ordinary boy from Jamaica.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that loads of practice would give a big success to every athlete despite the natural talent. This is because the abilities, received from birth, should be accompanied with loads of practice and because the athlete could get even better abilities than natural by hard training.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'record'.
Suggestion: record
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61757719715 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49381969191 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503562945368 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7575569658 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3636363636 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311307293713 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840750267989 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617692995939 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182870318354 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273505471467 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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