International communication undeniably is a crucial thing in human life. Nowdays interntert play an important role in communication that no one can deny. A contorversial argument regarding this topic is whether to ineternet should get provided free for everyone by governments or not. If I were obliged to choose, I would think that internet should be free for every citizens for several reasons, on a few of which I will elaborate subsequently.
To begin, I believe knowledge is a very crucial thing for a person, people with high knowlege can live a better life. Internet is an almost unlimited source of knowledge, you can learn almost anything from internet and I think this can help people to make a better life for their selves and better sociaty as well. I believe my opinion is partially influenced by my personal experience, when I was at high school, I began to learn programming from internet, I learned how to code excelent from online froums, after a while I found a high-paying job as a programmer, after while I started my own IT company and now I have about 20 employees. So as you see, If there was no internet I never could become such valueable person for my country and economy.
Secondly, I believe internet helps us to reduce costs so much, a lot of works can be done over internet. Internet provide world-wide communications, without internet, people and companies should do their paper works, meetings and etc. in person, travel local or international to get the jobs done. For instance think about a simple work like paying bills, before internet everyone had to go to bank or atms to pay their bills in person and this way has costs like public transportation, more bank operators, more traffic and etc. for government. But with internet provided for everyone, paying bills and lots of other works can be done in seconds with so much less costs and this save good amount of money for government to spend on other important things.
I resist the temptation to explain more, hopping there is enough information already. To sum it up, as the reasons suggest, providing internet access is just as important as other services, because not its help people to learn more and be better citizens, but it will save lots of costs from governments too.
- TOEFL T P O 1 Integrated Writing Task 3
- An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by airplanes and helic 83
- As early as the twelfth century A D the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their great houses massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand three or four stories high Archaeo
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 76
- TOEFL T P O 1 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...life for their selves and better sociaty as well. I believe my opinion is partial...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
... I was at high school, I began to learn programming from internet, I learned how to code ex...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...rammer, after while I started my own IT company and now I have about 20 employees. So a...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., without internet, people and companies should do their paper works, meetings an...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... should do their paper works, meetings and etc. in person, travel local or internationa...
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Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...tion, more bank operators, more traffic and etc. for government. But with internet provi...
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Line 5, column 662, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun costs is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rks can be done in seconds with so much less costs and this save good amount of mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82097186701 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81519582664 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547314578005 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5080673851 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0666666667 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248776025785 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079219476098 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709333683736 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150144522081 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442951679075 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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