Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of human, a plethora of rules have been enacted by the governments of leaders of societies in order to strengthen discipline and prevent several accidents and hustles. Young people, nowadays, are expected to obey many rules in their societies. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars on whether these rules are extremely strict for the youths. I vehemently cling to the notion that the currently adopted regulations in the modern world, regardless of the country, are too indeed strict for juveniles and put them under pressure. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, the speed with which the developments in young people's patterns of thought and insights are taking place, exceeds that of updating the regulations and rules of a society. To be more specific, young people are from a generation where their world views and attitudes are constantly changing due to the ever-increasing pace of changes and events occurring as a result of globalization and advances in technology. These momentary changes in the modern world, encourage the younger ones to break the boundaries and fight with the clichés. The laws governing the current society, however, have been adopted by the ones from the past generations, who do not merely have a proper conception and understanding of the concerns of youths. Therefore, the fact that changes hardly ever occur in those rules, is increasingly confining their lives. As an example, the recently emerged environmental crises have become one of the most significant aspects of young people's concerns. Nevertheless, the rules they have to obey in their societies prevent them from being able to do efficient deeds about them. This is because their societies have not yet reached that point where everyone can perceive the true concerns of our modern and hectic era. Therefore, it is crystal clear that these rules are too strict for young people.
Another equally compelling reason in corroborating my stance lies in the fact that the amount of depression and, consequently, the number of suicides in young people have proven to be extremely high and have reached an unprecedented record in the history. Given the liberal nature of human being, rules, apart from the advantages they offer regarding the organized systems, bring about mental issues in them. Young people, due to their free and wild spirits, are more prone to getting mentally hurt by seeing themselves in a world where they have to conform to lots of rules and social norms caused by policies that do not serve their interests. In fact, the results and statistics of a research conducted recently, indicate that the number of suicides and depressed, hopeless people are representatives of the major consequences of limitations being implemented in a society. It will be more perceivable when one takes a glance at the relative number of deaths in young people compared with the older ones who have learnt to deal with the rules.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned points and examples taken into account, I strongly believe that the copious regulations and rules in societies account for the majority of damages that are being inflicted on the youth's mental health every day. I firmly assert that these rules are too strict, as well as dispensable; meaning that people do not need any of them in order to have an organized country. Gone are days when old-fashioned and senior policy makers could easily enact rules and make decisions for people and make people feel content about them. In fact, I am of the opinion that a highly favorable society for juveniles without strict rules, will not only enhance its people's mood, but also bring up a healthier generation.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3183.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 629.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06041335453 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75853121533 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 212.727598566 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503974562798 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 995.4 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6485094936 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.391304348 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.347826087 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205884963683 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062926733101 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04111670017 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133036026907 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265019270173 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 86.8835125448 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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