Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Since the beginning of time, human beings have been putting all their efforts so as to find the best approaches to lead a superior society. For reaching this goal society make some low, and some of this low designed for young people to follow.
I believe following the law is very important, and very effective for making a great society. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my perspective by delving into the most prominent reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that following the rules allows young people to learn to be responsible. For example in schools, children learn to follow the primary roles in their lives. Some roles such as, being on time, and being polite in the class. These rules may seem simple and insignificant at first, but they play an important role in the future life of children. They learn for having a good result they should following the roles, that is the reasons schools are very important in the evolution of human personality.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that whitlow, and whit responsibility, people become valuable. In the extra point, this is important to say young people learn to be themselves more than ever. The development of human personality is highly dependent on their discipline. If people can follow social rules in the first place, they can also be trusted people in the continuation of life.
The last but not the least reason to be mentioned is that much of a person's independence depends on his or her obedience to the law. To be clear, I must add that independence means orderliness and responsibility. For example in my country, young people become adults at eighteen years old, and after that age, all the responsibility is on them, so it has necessary for everyone, 'spatially young people' to follow the law. I believe the rules that societies expect young people to follow and obey are not strict, and I think are necessary.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that Following the rules is vital for everyone, and young people are no exception. There is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but is not embraced due to the dearth of time.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ngs have been putting all their efforts so as to find the best approaches to lead a supe...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...eason to be mentioned is that much of a persons independence depends on his or her obed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, if, may, so, as to, for example, i think, such as, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84358974359 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76983492935 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.739283693 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4210526316 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248652011842 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08346571541 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857840172042 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135745189329 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524676488239 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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