Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate about whether the rules and regulations we are following today are tough or flexible. I strongly disagree with the statement that said: "The rules that societies expecting young people to follow and obey is too strict". I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, it is obvious that we are facing one of the biggest problems in the history of The United States which is the lack of security and increase criminal episodes among the youngest generations. I ultimately believe that if our societies' regulations were strict enough, we will not see our young people indulging themselves in illegal activity such as drugs, guns, and so on. For example, my neighbor, John,19 years old-young man, he was always absent from school, his parents were working all day and they had time neither for observing his behavior nor for following up on his homework performances. They simply failed in establishing and mandating strong rules to manage their son' life and well-being. Consequently, it was easy for him to participate in an illegal activity which ends his future in jail. This example clearly illustrates that our societies' rules are not strict enough to guide a young person in the right direction. instead, they lead to misrepresentation.
Another reason I think that societies' rules are not too strict, is the absence of a serious punishment which should follow any inappropriate act. Communities’ rules today are permitting the kids to do anything they like whether it is right or wrong without any restrictions. For example, my sister, who permits her 16 years old son to drive her car despite, He always over-speed the limit, especially in the residential and school district areas. My sister has warned him about this mistake, but she did not enforce any kind of punishment or obligation for him to stop this attitude. As a result, he is been in a severe car' accident which prohibited him from driving all his life. As we can see that our rules are not tough enough to protect our kids from deterioration.
In conclusion, I strongly believe rules that society expect young people to follow and obey are not too strict. Due to increasing the numbers of crimes among our young generations. In addition to the lack of punishments that should follow each reckless behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 938, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Instead
... a young person in the right direction. instead, they lead to misrepresentation. Ano...
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Line 4, column 687, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ohibited him from driving all his life. As we can see that our rules are not tough...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9798488665 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86778003441 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541561712846 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1734116391 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.052631579 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27554442594 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0930805344186 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124799441616 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217480471025 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113652369011 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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