When it comes to the rules that young people are expected to follow, some believe they are crucial and should be obeyed strictly. Indeed, we need regulations to keep our young people, the future of the country, moral and positive. However, in my opinion, the rules that regulate young people nowadays are a bit too stringent, especially in some aspects.
Family rules are probably the regulations that young people been asked to follow the most. Certain family rules teach children to be responsible and well-mannered. But in Asian countries, the expectations of parents are usually way beyond these simple rules. Because Asian parents take performances and grades of their children seriously, many kids are sent to cram schools after class. These kinds of rules and expectations force the children to pursue high scores on every subject blindly, without thinking about what they really interested in.
Speaking of the rules and young people, how can we not mention the schools. In Asain schools, we have rules about hair color, hairstyle, uniform and etc. Once we breach these rules, we would get punished. But the teachers never tell us about why we need to obey these rules. In addition, students are required to attend an additional course for several weeks every summer vacation. If any students don't want to take the course, they need to give their teacher a detailed reason with the signature of their parents. But which Asian parents would refuse this gift?
As for traditional Asian companies, there are also many strict and unreasonable rules that young people need to obey. As the freshmen of the company, young people are often being asked to take extra time to do more jobs without any paying. If managers or elder employees are still working, they are not allowed to get off work even if they already finish their works. Besides, no matter how talented and skilled they are, they should always obey the company's rules thoroughly and not propose any objection.
From the above discussion, I believe the rules that societies expect young people to follow are too strict to obey. The overly strict rules not only limit the creativity of young people, but also put them under unnecessary stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, really, so, still, well, as for, in addition, speaking of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0108401084 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41360740263 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560975609756 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2367767657 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.0476190476 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242409042473 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076758286647 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925965031532 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157230051278 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838041631561 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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