Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Amir Reza on Wed, 09/11/2019 - 13:04

It goes without saying that everyone has a specific role in society and young people are more confronting with the rules in society. Sometimes societies trying to make some rules to control their members, especially youngsters. I, personally, believe that some rules which societies expect young people to obey are very tough and should be reconsidered. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reasons to clarify my viewpoint.

The first reason which comes to my mind is that some rules may stop young people from progress. Rules are invented to help people live more convenient and happier but sometimes they are too strict which confine people and do not let them thrive. Young people could be valuable merit for society, societies should help them and use their innovative mind for creating new technologies. The rules will slow down the pace of progress and eventually will make young people disappointed. In some economic conditions, let us consider a society which comprises a lot of young people, that makes so many unnecessary rules in the bank. For example, rules could be changed and help young people by providing them a loan to start a business, without making them tired of some strict expectation.

Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that young people have the spirit of freedom. They do not like to obey another person and want to be independent. In this case, some of the strict rules might get youth freedom and do not let them do whatever they want. Therefore, they will stand against the rules and want to change it. Youth want to enjoy their life while sometimes they think that societies do not let them. Societies should be softer and exclude young people from some of their strict rules to make them more satisfying. As a result, young people would be happier and will play their role more effectively in society, which leads society toward success.

To sum up, based on the aforementioned paragraphs, some strict rules that are implementing in society not only prevent young people from going on but also may make them frustrated. Young people are the most populated group in a society, in this situation, is not it better for the societies to adapt their rules to the acquisitions of the youth?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 31, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...ion. Another reason which deserves being mentioned here is that young people hav...
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Line 11, column 183, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...d want to be independent. In this case, some of the strict rules might get youth freedom an...
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Line 11, column 559, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... make them more satisfying. As a result, young people would be happier and will p...
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Line 17, column 267, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...a society, in this situation, is not it better for the societies to adapt their rules ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95263157895 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5687176274 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463157894737 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.405755106 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0526315789 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275672597657 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103667533978 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396197741209 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196180208751 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443201903429 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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