Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teacher
than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Students are subjected to a variety of circumstances that can have a prominent role in their behaviors. Friends and teachers are the most sources for such pieces of training. A controversial question which is often raised in this regard is that which one of these categories has the most influences on students. I firmly believe that their friends more than by the teachers influence students. Not only, they spend a lot of time with each other, but also students often imitate the presented behaviors by people who have virtually the same age.
First and foremost, students communicate with their friends most of the time. They talk about different issues related to common interests. As a result, each of them states previous experiences and achievements. Consequently, what they are discussing sticks in their mind as a potential method in similar conditions. As a result, they learn a lot about different matters. Let's clarify the mentioned reason by an example of myself. I had been engaging with musical instruments before I entered the art school. At that time, I had a well-known teacher who was an adept person in playing the piano. However, he taught me a lot lessons in this regard but most of the time I had difficulties with this matter. His advices were not useful for me as my close friend were. In fact my friend gave me some instructions that to some extent they were different from the teacher. After a while I could have remarkable achievements in playing piano efficiently. That's why after this experience, I tried to share my bugs more by friends rather than by teachers. Needless to say, my friends have always had stronger influences on me rather than the others.
Second, students are eager to imitate the observed behaviors that are presented by their friends. This process pave the way for them in order to grasp what they really need in an effective way. As a result, the other's opinions often don't have influence on them. This is especially important when the students are teenagers. Since, they have a sense of proud to ask something. They try to carefully trace the behaviors of the friends and take the desirable outcomes in this way. For instance, my little brother is always trying to imitate the presented expressions by his girlfriend. His teacher's advices about morality issues do not have impression on him. Had he notice to the teacher in effectively, he would have given up many improper expressions. That's why the imitating process of the students has a profound effect on them.
In brief, there is no doubt that students try to be influenced by their friends rather than by teachers. This claim is based on two main reasons, the passion for imitating the behaviors of the friends and spending a lot of time with them in their routine activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople who have virtually the same age. First and foremost, students communicate...
^^^
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ey learn a lot about different matters. Lets clarify the mentioned reason by an exam...
^^^^
Line 3, column 868, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t they were different from the teacher. After a while I could have remarkable achieve...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ievements in playing piano efficiently. Thats why after this experience, I tried to s...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'paves'.
Suggestion: paves
...resented by their friends. This process pave the way for them in order to grasp what...
^^^^
Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...in order to grasp what they really need in an effective way. As a result, the others opinions often...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... As a result, the others opinions often dont have influence on them. This is especia...
^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ortant when the students are teenagers. Since, they have a sense of proud to ask some...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'noticed'.
Suggestion: noticed
...s do not have impression on him. Had he notice to the teacher in effectively, he would...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 753, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ave given up many improper expressions. Thats why the imitating process of the studen...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, while, for instance, in brief, in fact, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8781512605 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73750378677 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9905930313 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.9032258065 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3548387097 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25806451613 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15149400461 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441061965383 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526724157978 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111966738433 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281235525946 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.