Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Companies should pay for employees to get a university degree
Nobody can ignore the importance of education on the performance of people. It helps them to strengthen their abilities in order to have better outcomes in their activities. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this point is that does education at the university is important for the employees of the companies? If yes does it has an influence on their income from the company side? Some people believe that companies should not pay more for getting the university degree. others, including me, have an opposite viewpoint. I firmly believe that the employees should earn more salary when they attend the universities for getting the degree. Not only does this process change the perspective of the employees to be more efficient, but also they will have a lot of valuable information in diverse fields. In what follows, I will scrutinize the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, being in the university environment has a profound effect on the employees' personality. They learn many skills that just exist in universities. For instance being diligent is a golden concept that everyone who attends at the university should try to perceive it as much as possible. Consequently, it paves the way for companies to have hardworking employees. Needless to say, it will increase the efficiency of the companies effectively. Let's consider my own personal experience as an example. I had been working as a machining operator for five years before I entered the University of Tehran. Our company announced that three groups of employees can participate in universities in order to get the mechanical engineering degree. I registered at this major to enhance my abilities. Before going there I was not familiar with the severe circumstances of the universities. I had to study hard to pass the exams. After a while, this behavior became a part of my character. When I came back to the industrial environment I tried to keep this behavior and it helped me to allocate more time to be active during the assigned tasks.
A furthermore significant point is that universities help people to be aware of the latest and updated information about their field of expertise. Having invaluable information is useful for employees to implement them in practical conditions when they are working at the companies. Therefore, it will be lucrative for the companies. For instance, my little brother had a small industrial company. He was always eager to manufacture the new objects using the recent technological methods. For this purpose, he ordered to three employees to participate in machining workshops at the University of Tehran. In order to give them strong motivation, my brother said to the selected employees that they will be paid more money if they pass the final exams successfully. Using their experience, his company could achieve fantastic goals to be selected as the pioneer company in Iran. Had not he encouraged the employees for the university degree, he would not be able to reach this level of success.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, it seems that paying more money to employees who have obtained a university degree is a rational strategy can be useful for both the employees and the companies. Therefore, this strategy is highly recommended for everyone as a manager who wishes to have better employees in the near future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2843.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12252252252 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00532438805 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488288288288 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5405980134 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1515151515 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8181818182 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254006751568 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659957318524 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717415709016 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172030137746 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250549369735 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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