Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today many people are seeking the keys to success. One of these keys is risk-taking and trying to be innovative instead of following the old fashions. I agree with this opinion and I would argue that risk-taking can lead individuals to be successful by improving their personal traits and providing many benefits in their professions.
First of all, risk-taking can help people to improve different positive characteristics, one of which is self-confidence. confidence comes from encountering with a challenging situation. When an individual try doing things beyond one’s capabilities, one steps outside of one’s comfort zone which would be the foundations of a higher self-confidence. In a survey, conducted by the researchers in the department of the business management of the University of Toronto in 2016, 100 entrepreneurs and 120 top managers were asked to answer a round of questions, demonstrating their level of self-confidence, and rate how sure they were about their responses. The results show that although both groups were very confident, the entrepreneurs, constantly involving in trying new things, had a considerably higher level of confidence. Another personal attribute which can be promoted by trying new things is creativity. Creativity, which is about imagination and invention original and new ideas and paths, cannot be achieved unless one thinks out of the box and try to do new things or do old things in a new fashion. This is not an inborn characteristic and one should embrace the risk of failure and initial resistant of others and think in another way to generate novel ideas. Therefore, the first step to becoming creative is taking the risks of pursuing new ways and ideas.
Secondly, individuals can benefit from risk-taking in their professions. Unforeseen opportunities usually come from risk-taking. If one does all the things as previous and as others, one will get to the previous and others’ outcomes. Unsatisfied with the current situation, many entrepreneurs try to introduce new ways of solving problems. In our age of digital transformation, there are a plethora of examples of online startups that change and ease our life such as Uber, Amazon, Dropbox and many other the like which all are the consequents of the innovative ideas of their founders. If they had not taken the risk of what they did, the world would not have undergone the changes we know today. Furthermore, taking risk is a great opportunity for a person to stand out as a pioneer, not a follower satisfied with the status quo. In this way, one will face less competition, while in case of being risk-averse and doing the regular professions, one should compete with other rivals.
Thus, with the above in mind, successful people often try to take the risk of trying new things and risk-taking is one of the cardinal steps to success by providing people with personal and professional benefits. Taking risk not only lets individuals further their self-confidence and creativity but also helps them innovate new opportunities with less competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Confidence
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Message: Consider replacing "in a new fashion" with adverb for "new"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2592.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23636363636 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18885929282 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7921436629 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.818181818 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274501997736 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822229887058 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558079659027 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185646746815 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371248415492 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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