Competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships.
Human is a social animal and friendships are vital to his mental health, happiness, and well-being. It is, therefore, essential to make good friends and try to keep them. On the other hand, in today’s world of competition, sometimes friends might become rivals for each other. While some believe that this situation can be harmful to the quality of this relationship, others, as do I, disagree with this belief. Because rivalry between friends does not mean enmity also they can help each other to succeed because of knowing each other pretty well.
Firstly, competition is not equal to be jealous of the opponent’s success and want to try to harm others. Healthy competition can help individuals to thrive themselves and go toward the final aim. In this respect, one should play fair as well as respect other competitors. If people try to use the simple rules of the healthy way, they never will come up with conflicts, especially in case of competing with their companions. Thus, the phrase “Winning is not everything” is an essential lesson for life and when friends take this lesson, they will value the healthy competition and their friend's achievement.
Furthermore, friends can be one another’s best instructors. They are aware of both each person’s capabilities and rules of the game and are thereby able to help each other to thrive and surpass their old selves. In this respect, I can recall my own experience when I and my best friends attended in a national gymnastic match five years ago. During our practice, we were under pressure and we did not have a coach and we should get ready by ourselves. But we never disappointed about this because each of us was the other’s instructor having the best wishes for each other. Finally, she got the first place and I got the second one. After that our relationship became even closer. Had we not help each other, we could not have become successful in that match. This has learned me that when individuals help each other, everybody wins.
Thus, with the above in mind, in case of healthy competition, friendships would not be worse affected. And friends can help themselves achieve success, leading to a close-knit friendship.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'will' and 'come'.
Suggestion: will never come
...e simple rules of the healthy way, they never will come up with conflicts, especially in case o...
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Line 5, column 649, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e first place and I got the second one. After that our relationship became even close...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01078167116 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88023773831 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55795148248 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8829035397 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5238095238 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0902801372776 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293407436575 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363905826872 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620866106878 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299850267769 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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