Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, people are struggling with a variety of problems to be successful and satisfied. While some people believe that it would be beneficial for successful to take risks, others hold the view that successful people should be doing what they know how to do well. Personally speaking, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two substantiate reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, taking risks will open for successful people more doors of experience, and they gain plethoral information about different subjects and situations. These days all things are turning in high speed and prosperous people need a lot of experience to keep up with the progression of the globe. Otherwise, taking risks brings up most experiences and knowledge and helps successful people keep pace with evolutions of the world which, in turn, leads to more successes. For example, my uncle had successful managers. One day he had decided to study in the field of marketing, while others had been telling him that you are prosperous, and he does not need to study in a new filed. After he graduated from the marketing department, he got a lot of knowledge about marketing strategies. Then, he sold his products in superior rates. Had he not taken the risk to study in a new field, he can not be successful as much as today.
Secondly, prosperous people prefer to take risks because it would be beneficial for them and improve their self-confidence. By taking risk successful people can cope with problems better, so they can get positive reactions from others and feel better about themselves which, in turn, results in enhancing self-confidence. Psychologically speaking, the more the better handle problems, the more improvement self-confidence. For instance, my brother is a mayor. Two years ago, he was a successful person in governing the city. When he decided to make a new park in entrancing of the city, all of his co-workers rejected his proposition. As a result, he lost his confidence but made that park and after that, not only his co-workers appreciated him, but also all of the residents. Therefore he felt better about his decision and got his confidence again.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned above into account, I do believe that successful people try new things and take risks than doing what they know how to do well. This is because not only prosperous people get abundance of information about various subjects and situations but also improve self-confidence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 757, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...is co-workers appreciated him, but also all of the residents. Therefore he felt better abo...
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Line 5, column 779, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ted him, but also all of the residents. Therefore he felt better about his decision and g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06060606061 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97215685995 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48951048951 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1580777547 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6818181818 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68181818182 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323052453131 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846364806125 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132650418418 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246972970791 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154869507092 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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